How's My Driving?

[codename_fire]

Here for numerous reasons:
#1. I want to improve.
#2. I want to learn.
#3. I want to listen.
#4. I want to be understood.
#5. I want to play her as well as she deserves.
#6. I want to create a enjoyable experience for any potential taggers and old friends.

Anything offered is appreciated, including praise.
For the most part, what I look for in a critique is constructive criticism - this means I want to know what you like, what you're iffy about and possibly how it all can be improved all while trying to cite canon points I may have missed that may, in fact, be a rather large part of portraying her character.


tl;dr
Constructive crits please, thank you.

Comments

[darn-socks.livejournal.com]

It seems like you've extremely rushed Noin and Zechs' relationship and marriage in this game, and it makes it difficult for people to attempt cr with you. Also the fact that you didn't involve other canonmates seems off, especially Treize. From my standpoint, you're playing a group game like it's a one-on-one, and that does not work. This goes for Zechs as well, if you want to share the crit with them.

Using a sock because you've turned off anon.

Hi there o/

[11ady]

So the HMD meme just went up and I thought it would be as good a time as any to get my crit for you in here as well. :3 On the matter of characterization, I think you're pretty all right. We've discussed our characters a lot and you understand that Noin is a strong woman. I like how you do piloting with her and the missions we played out together as a Preventer team. It's always a pleasure when we do 3-in-1 CR as Prev interacting cross-canonically with others aboard the ship.

However, I do think you've been putting too much on Noin of late? Like I think you have her breakdown far too often? Again, she's a strong woman. Sure, she can angst with the best of them but note when she breaks down in canon. It's BIG things like having her soldiers murdered in their sleep and failing to catch the one responsible. In most other things, she's pretty chill even when her heart is breaking. She's the cool team mom contrasting Une being the disciplinarian team mom. On Peacemillion, even when she was sad about Zechs, she stayed strong and didn't really show her distress. I'm not saying Noin should be stoic but she has more restraint in canon? Even when Zechs is coming at her with a beam saber, she doesn't cry. She calmly puts down her Taurus's weapon and winces, bracing herself for the death to come. I suppose what I'm trying to say is it takes A LOT to get Noin to break. What I find disheartening though is you seem to enjoy playing that angle of her to a point where she's constantly shattering. You play that angle well but it would be good to see more facets. Perhaps sign her up for missions and plots that will permit her to have more fun rather than place her in peril? Over the course of the four months Noin's been in the game she's arrived injured, witnessed two wormholings, lost Naina, lost Heero and Relena, had disagreements with Zechs, suffered sabotage to her suit and fallen prey to an eye condition. That's a lot for just four months. I'd really recommend allowing her to be happier and giving her a breather.

Thanks for bearing with my tl;dr. I consulted with Tash before posting this since she did a lot of those plots alongside you. She was an immense help in composing this. I do hope you'll take this to heart. Thank you very much.